Revise for Clarity

Grade 4 Writing Worksheet

Circle the revision that says it most clearly.

1. 1.

   The class read for twenty minutes before lunch. The draft says, "We read for a while at some point." Which revision is clearest?

   • We read for twenty minutes before lunch.
   • We read for some minutes at some point.
   • We read for a while before we ate.
   • We read for a long time at school today.
2. 2.

   Grandpa used oil to fix the squeaky back door. The draft says, "Grandpa fixed the thing." Which revision is clearest?

   • Grandpa fixed the thing that was squeaky.
   • Grandpa worked hard on the house today.
   • Grandpa oiled the squeaky back door.
   • Grandpa fixed the door in some way.
3. 3.

   The class saw a baby goat and two ducks at the farm. The draft says, "We saw some animals at the place." Which revision is clearest?

   • We saw a baby goat and some animals there.
   • We saw animals at a place we visited.
   • We saw some animals at the farm.
   • We saw a baby goat and two ducks at the farm.
4. 4.

   Coach Lee told the team to run two laps before practice. The draft says, "The coach said to do something first." Which revision is clearest?

   • The coach said we should get ready for the thing.
   • Coach Lee told us to run two laps before practice.
   • Coach Lee told us to do something before practice.
   • The coach told us to do a few things first.