Revise for Clarity
Grade 4 Writing Worksheet - Challenge Me

Circle the revision that says it most clearly.
Which revision gives a reader the clearest picture? "The sky looked weird before the storm."
- The sky looked very weird before the big storm.
- The sky was different before the storm came in.
- The sky looked strange and odd before the storm.
- The sky turned a dark greenish gray before the storm.
Which revision gives a reader the clearest picture? "The soup tasted bad."
- The soup tasted wrong and unpleasant.
- The soup tasted very bad and awful.
- The soup tasted burnt and bitter.
- The soup tasted not good at all.
Which revision gives a reader the clearest picture? "The room was a mess."
- The room looked really bad and untidy.
- The room was very messy and not tidy at all.
- The room was a big mess with lots of stuff.
- Wet towels, torn paper, and one muddy sneaker covered the floor.
Which revision gives a reader the clearest picture? "The dog was happy to see me."
- The dog wagged its tail and bounced around me when I came home.
- The dog was glad and cheerful when it saw me.
- The dog seemed really excited to see me.
- The dog was very, very happy to see me.


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